Scarlet Stained

I wrote this a while back ago. I would like to learn ways to improve my writing. Please feel free to comment on it. Thanks. :)

‘Scarlet Stained’I knew of you too well. The icy chills would run down my spine whenever you were near. Keeping my distance by ignoring your existence, I would hide behind your shadows. Creeping, crawling with secrecy, I shudder at the haunting call of your voice. Breaking my eardrums, bleeding in agony. My life is strung upon a string of thread like a spider’s web. You are the black widow who furiously watches the tiny, helpless fly trapped within your seductive lure. My lips bleed of scarlet blood. There are bloodstains on the floor. A bruise embeds my face.Your words of love. Or that of hate? You told me countless lies - I believed them. I lie awake contemplating on the insomniaty you induce me with. Who’s to blame? Like a spike upon the mallet, you slash. Like a scab on a wound, you scar. Like the demon in an exorcism, you possess. A billion apologies won’t make it go away. It only makes it worse. Dark crimson bruises. More stains. A shattered heart. Shards of glass.

3 comments ↓

#1 Nymph on 03.28.01 at Mar 28, 01 | 7:47 pm

This is poetry. Beautiful, simple poetry. It’s good keepp writing.

The Nymph

#2 Kei on 03.29.01 at Mar 29, 01 | 2:09 am

I love the metaphors… it sounds like it would go at the beginning of a story, a prologue. Please keep writing…

#3 pscycopathickittin on 09.23.03 at Sep 23, 03 | 1:47 am

i love this. god man keep writing i want to c more.well if u do write more i cant wait to c