How do I begin to explain how I feel inside?
The trouble and pain I’ve caused in your mind.
The amount of times you’ve tried.
I throw it back again in lies.
Now alone again in my thoughts
I sit and write of what another day’s brought.
The thoughts of you inside my head,
My broken body upon the bed.
All this talk of love,
These “heavenly words of God above”
They just float by,
Drowned by sorrow,
Another heart and soul I’d like to borrow.
I see your face and smile to myself
This happiness you bring me,
I could never tell.
Through my foolishness you’re fading away
And I’m alone without a friend to try another day.
In my heart, I think I love you
But with the pain that pounds,
these words are untrue
I leave your side
Bottle this thought inside
And face what tomorrow holds.
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Beautiful one… I can reflect my own thoughts in your words.
that was very beutiful
that was very beutiful
i agree, that was beautiful.
Hmm… quite nice… I wonder why they didn’t put it under poetry.
I like the way you havn’t rhymed perfectly, with stupidly obvious words, it’s nice.
haha nice poem faggot.
Impale yourself on a stake you worthless jew.
Ah, the troll again. You really should find other ways of coping with your pain, flamebaiting doesn’t really work as well as the alternatives.
k…. i still liked it
that was really good. I liked it a lot. Keep writing
Thats good as.
Hmm, i liked it.
~ LAYDEE OF DA NITE ~
Erm…KILLYOURFAMILY, that was very interesting. Take your own advice.
Anyway, that was a lovely poem. I think a lot of people can relate to it who reads it, and it’s great that you’re able to make it personal yet relateable…if that makes sense…if that’s even a word…nice job.
Deep, and shut the fuck up KILLYOURFAMILY
Yeah wow I loved this! It’s real, as…. Beautiful Mess said, the obvious rhyming ones aren’t there cause they rhyme. It’s lovely.”Another heart and soul I’d like to borrow” <- Loved that line, and Loved the last stanza… cool!
very well written. i like it. can almost envision the emotion being conveyed iin the words.
lol @ pitiful anonymous “relateable”… if thats a word it would better be “relatetoable”…. or something heheh
or relatable
hehe
Tear
Keep crying you zionist faggot’s
Your poem only proves your jewish sickness
Skull fuck your self with a shotgun you filthy sub-human!
slaughter…its assholes like you that give me my everyday entertainment
pitiful_anonymous
You are a blind disiple of zion
I dont think i have to go in to detail about you degeracy for you are clearly a filthy sub-human parasite
DEATH TO ZION!
“for you are clearly a filthy sub-human parasite ” CLEARLY! come on now, we all already knew THAT!
Okies you go in your little corner and have fun with your fantasies…good luck with that.
Next time you and your dad are at your synagogue geting fucked in the mouth take a look at your self and relise that your a filthy fucking jewish slave and end your life!
Aryan Blut Uber Alles!
My father is dead. And not because of whatever on fucking Satan’s grey earth you’re talking about. It’s because he broke his neck and drowned in a river. If you make one crack on him, I hope someone takes a shot gun, and shoots off your fake penis. Then I will personally shove swords up your ass and down your throat, I’ll cut you up with my razor that I use for shaving my legs. Obviously I’m not jewish since I believe in Satan, and if you continue to be such an assfucking “filthy fucking jewish slave” then I will continue dreaming up ways in which to brutally, violently and happily beat your ass on your jewish master’s dick. So stick that in your pipe and smoke it, bitch. I don’t go to any synagogues, so again go fuck your jewish mother and suck your sister’s dick.
pitiful_anonymous,
“I believe in Satan”
Satanism is a jewish creation just as Cristianity so i doint know what you talking about.
You do not know my definition of Satan.
SLAUGHTER THE JEWISH SWINE!:
Hmph, here we are again with “SLAUGHTER THE JEWISH SWINE” an “amazing” historian who has told us that the notion of all races are not equal is a Jewish lie, and a lot of other “jewish lies”. Now he has come out to tell us that Jewish people spawned Satan. You are truly an insect. How old are you? 11, 12? The age group surely matches your illiteracy and absurd comments, which make absolutely no sense.
You cannot come here child and throw these unintelligent comments around like they are factious, there are intelligent people here looking for intelligent discussions. I think you would belong more on a children’s forum. Your illiteracy is astounding and you would have easily been cast out from the National Socialist workers. Why aspire to someone who hates you? I guess you are a masochist. Isn’t being a masochist considered degenerate? Yes “degenerate” not “degenrate” like you have been noting so often.
great…i can really relate to what you said
every once in a while someone says something like “great…i can really relate to what you said” and i dont realize they’re talking about the original poem until a few seconds later. dun know why i said that.
i think bruggian pretty much wrapped that up. nice job. your efforts are 10,000 times more successfull than mine…doesn’t say much though. nice job.
this poem, so much talent
i loved it i cud relate so intensly
…:)leighxxx
Nice, like it……
To SLAUGHTER THE JEWISH SWINE:
My friend, you are truly the biggest asshole I ever have recognized without actually knowing you. You deserve to die, and rot in a dark place from which there is no escape. If you respond to my post with another of your “damn jewish sub-human filth” lines, then I will make it my life’s mission to aid pitiful anonymous in making your pointless, boring, sad life a living hell, and then take pleasure in watching you die a death worthy of your “jewish sub-human filth”… As for the original post…lol…truly an excellent journey into the depths of the human soul. I enjoyed it immensely, and hope to see more work from you.
Very nice.
SLTJS is just trying to get attention….your wasting your time and emotions on him. But if you guys want to kill him, I doubt he’ll be missed.
thats was awesome.i have so much to relate in that poem.
Lovely. All I have to say.
First-rate effort, nostalgic feelings brought in the heart, but no face to what tomorrow holds…
I would like to know who else SLAUGHTER THE JEWISH SWINE! posts as… Just cuz I find it interesting that some of the old people have all returned at the same time (coincidentally), and this creature has also showed up.
very nice…posionedcandy…
sounds in a way like my life. very good.
what can i say u can see talent here…keep writing…
your talent is amazing your poem truly touched me it explanes what i fill like in my own soual and mind.
thank you
this is some of the deepest stuff i have ever read…after reading it, i wrote some of my own best work to date…thank you for the inspiration…is this drawn from expirience?
yep i agree
i really like it! but it make me sad also, i felt like that for many years… anyway… it great! ;p
Tho i have friends, im still alone… i always have been and always will be
ur not a very talented writer.
I find that this peom in some way goes against itself. It doesn’t stick to one topic. But i can see what others are talking about. It does have a nice idea to it, if you don’t pay mind to the other thoughts in it. Or maybe I’m just simple mind, and don’t understand. Or I’m far intelligent where I notice the inobvicious. but either way I find that this peom needs a little change in my opinion
I find that this peom in some way goes against itself. It doesn’t stick to one topic. But i can see what others are talking about. It does have a nice idea to it, if you don’t pay mind to the other thoughts in it. Or maybe I’m just simple mind, and don’t understand. Or I’m far intelligent where I notice the inobvicious. but either way I find that this peom needs a little change in my opinion, but what do I know
I find that this peom in some way goes against itself. It doesn’t stick to one topic. But i can see what others are talking about. It does have a nice idea to it, if you don’t pay mind to the other thoughts in it. Or maybe I’m just simple mind, and don’t understand. Or I’m far intelligent where I notice the inobvicious. but either way I find that this peom needs a little change in my opinion, but what do I know
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I find that this peom in some way goes against itself. It doesn’t stick to one topic. But i can see what others are talking about. It does have a nice idea to it, if you don’t pay mind to the other thoughts in it. Or maybe I’m just simple mind, and don’t understand. Or I’m far intelligent where I notice the inobvicious. but either way I find that this peom needs a little change in my opinion, but what do I know
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shit, i hate this computer.bah
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that was very good i wish that i could write down my how i fell inside, but it won’t make a diffrence.
it’s a wothly writing to read i like the way you write it’s meaningful….
it’s quite true i’m sure for many people…. good job hope to read more
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