She silently sipped from the brightly colored, plaster coffee cup held in one careless hand. With the other she lazily browsed the internet on her laptop.
Supposed to be working on the term paper due for her creative writing class, she decided to take a short break and look at a few sites she had been meaning too. Her shoulder length blonde, streaked purple, hair was held up loosely in a black clip. Oval-shaped black glasses balanced gently on a small sloping nose. Pale green, rimmed by dark blue, eyes scanned the screen. Blood-red lips were bunched in a tight frown.
no offence but i feel this is boring. A short story needs to capture the readers attention and all you’ve given us so far is a description of a blond girl. it doesn’t tell us anything at all. Finish it if you want, i guess it can only get better.
Vixodus
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Vixodus is pretty damn accurate… This is boring, and with that amount of space I can begin and end a story. Yeesh… Kinda wasteful of time.
finish it! once i read a story with such an elaborate beginning, i cant possibly stay hanging!
I agree with Vix. It sounds boring now but with the rest of the story added it may prove interesting reading. Finish it I reckon.
You can’t expect people to comment on a…thing, if it has only 7 lines and no action. You just described a girl with anime style hair and a coffee cup. Really, write something longer and hell, make it a real story and then ask for comments…and why is it always blood-red lips dammit? Only I have pink lips in this world?
Good description,but before you post it you hv a little bit of action!