Dawn Razor

This is my second post on Darkness, and I’d really appreciate any input.

Thank you.


And the Raven descended upon the child and stole her away to his castle in the mountains. And she grew to be a lovely woman with beautiful golden hair and pearl white skin.

The Raven cherished her and gave her all the jewels and silks that any woman could ever desire, but she was not happy. And he promised to love her for all eternity, but she still was not happy. For he kept her as a bird in a cage. A beautiful bird, whom above all else, desired to be free. He loved her deeply, but feared that if he let her out of her prison, she would not return, so he never let her fly. He tried to comfort her, but nothing he could say would cease her tears. One day he went to see his precious lady, but she was not there. In her place in the cage was a beautiful dove. She pleaded with the Raven to let his lady be free. The Raven, believing that the dove had stolen his beautiful bride, killed the dove and quickly left the castle to exact his anger out on the village from whence he had stolen the girl. Upon his return to the castle, he discovered his fair beauty in the cage where she always had been, but something was different. Snow-white wings protruded from her shoulder blades, where none had been before. His dagger plunged in her now still chest. He realized that she was the dove, who had begged for freedom. Distraught, he exiled himself to the deepest part of his castle, never to be seen again.

By CryingRain1

I'm always confused and I cry when I can't take it anymore. Maybe it's a bit babyish, but I don't care. Sometimes the tears flow and I just can't make them stop.


  1. That was very well written. I am not sure I understand it’s message, but it was very good. Keep writing


  2. I agree with wolf, I thinks it’s a really good story and I hope to see more of them. Keep up the good work.

  3. Well done piece…I know the story, it has happened in my lifetime symbolically, so it means something personal to myself…thankyou for posting it.

  4. Thank you, all of you.

    The message behind it was that if you truly love something, you should let it go. It means nothing if it is unhappy. His princess wanted to fly. She would have returned, but he never trusted her. He always kept her locked up and so she died always wanting to be free.

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