Assandra looked up at Shane with worry in her eyes. It was her father.
“It’s him.” Shane said.
“Let him come.” Assandra said.
“No, I can’t let you die.” Shane said. “Not because of him.”
Assandra smiled weakly. Her father finally made it through the window.
“You!” he yelled pointing to Assandra. “Get your lazy ass out of that bed!”
Assandra ignored him. Please don’t hurt me, she thought. Her father lost his patience and grabbed her by the back of her shirt. He yanked her up and threw her across the room.
“Leave her alone!” Shane yelled getting up out of the bed.
“You stay outta this you little shit!” Her dad yelled and punched Shane in his face.
Assandra lie on the floor helpless and weak knowing she was going to die. Her father walked over to her and pulled a knife.
“Finally, I get rid of you.” he said and brought it down into her side.
“Ahh!!” Assandra screamed in pain as her own father-her own-stabbed her to death with the knife.
Shane got up off the bed again and tackled him from behind; knocking the knife out of his hand. Assandra lie on the ground motionless. Her body was paralyzed from the stabs.
But Shane and her father continued to fight. Her father grabbed Shane by the back of his head and rammed it into the wall. He ricocheted off the wall and fell onto his back stunned. Shane’s nose was bleeding severely and blood seeped out of his mouth. Assandra’s father stomped on Shane’s stomach afew times enjoying beating the shit outta him.
But all of a sudden, a boy about seventeen years old entered, noticed Shane being beaten and tackled Assandra’s father. They boy knocked him out the window. Assandra’s father fell onto the ground and landed with a loud, sickening thump. A puddle of blood soon formed beneath him.
The boy who pushed Assandra’s father out the window walked over to Shane and helped him up.
“You ok?” he asked.
“Yeah….who are you?” Shane asked looking through the darkness.
“So they brainwashed you that bad, huh?” the boy said. “I’m….your brother.”
“Kyle?” Shane asked, hopeful.
“Yeah, it’s me.” Kyle answered.
They hugged eacother for a while but Shane soon rememebered Assandra. He pulled back and ran over to her. Shane kneeled down next to her.
“We need to get her to the hospital.” Shane said, worried.
“We’ll get her there. And we don’t have to pay niether.” Jeremy said.
“Why?” Shane asked.
“Because, my foster father works there and he can help us anyway.” Jeremy answered.
“Ok, good.” Shane said and lifted Assandra into his arms carefully.
Jeremy put his hand on Shane’s shoulder.
“SHe’ll be alright.” he said.
Shane nodded and looked down at Assandra. Then, he remembered, how would he get past HIS father?……
whoo….this story is good…and … what do you call it…it keeps you reading :)…but….where did kyle go, and who’s this…jeremy???!!! could it be you mixed up sth? 🙂
I was wondering the exact same thing as iDraTherbEan+geL , but it was great. I love it. Will there be more? I’d love to see more from you. You are a great writer and should deffinetly continue. You work with the suspence is great too.
there will be more and yes i messed up i was trhinking of some other guy at the same time the guys name is Kyle ok? sorry bout that i make mistakes typing fast.
That was very good. One suggestion (I know you were typing fast) – change the “stabbed her to death” because I thought that meant she was dead but then she wasn’t.
this is actually pretty good. i think i’m going to have to go back and read the first three parts.
okay, now that i’ve read the other two parts, i’m really eager to see where this is going.
lol ill type up the next part dont worry just let me think a while….
bout time!!! loved it… take ur time, but i await part 4 in agony!
-mer
Loved the story! Really good, but hurry up and do part 4, i’m gonna go mad waiting for it!
i think i submitted part four already 🙂
DAM GOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOD…..WE NEED PART 4..ITS JUST SO FUCKIN GOOD…you R such a good writer
thnx
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I really liked it, but I have a question if Kyle is Shane’s Brother, who is the foster father that you introduced as his dad? Isn’t Shane’s dad the one that hit him…oh well I am probably giving this too much thinking! Sorry..
But as ₪ • ●übeŁ● • ₪ said, it’s pretty good!
Hey I need to go read the rest but so far it was pretty damn good!! 🙂
i like this alot u r very talented and i can’t wait for the rest!!!
Damn good job ……… Good suspence writting ………Hope to see #4
you should look for #4 dude i already poster #5 😀 #6 coming up next…