I cry all these tears for you you can’t release the pain from your body you go telling me all your stories the hurt the suffering the things I’ve never been through now released into my brain
and oh the pain how did you do it you succeeded through it you are still here today now I must push through it and see what you saw I feel what you felt perhaps even worse you say you didn’t succeed but if you are still here my friend I would say you will win the end of time will come and you will be standing all alone your sword in hand you will have just begun for now though lay your pain on me your hurt and the tears you could never cry because I will go through it for you I will take it all away I will be the one to suffer I will lay here forever in bed I will lose all hope I will be your scape goat I will have nothing to live for I will surround the emptiness and rejoice in the pain I my friend will take it away from you the memories the harsh cold I will cry the tears you finally gave to me I will hold them in the palm of my hand and drink their salt I will crystallize the water that’s left and put them in a jar label it lost hand it to you show you what I went through go sleep in peace wake up at dawn and now my friend now I’m gone
after the first three lines i decided i couldn’t read it because there was no punctuation. Sorry.
Vixodus… the meaning within this is sorrow, and utter pain within happiness….. Perhaps that is our heritage, our birthright, what we are when we are born… I say that for all peoples….. It is too late to disinherit this world, unless you never had it.
I must second Vixodus. What is it, a big long sentence with no end? It’s like spitting on the floor and calling it “art!”
i thought it was very moving and original so i don’t care what others has to say abot it.
using no puntuation is a form of style, like asyndenton or something. but really, I have to agree that despite the style statement the loss of clarity is too great. nice attempt though
yeah..ok.
you willing to metamorpghose the pain to felicity?
never mind the punctuations or the structure and all that..the essence is what make things worth reading.
hey!
we only see , what we want to see
definitely you have seen the flaws.
i found it very intriguing and it seems to represent a true friend who lays their life on the line for u……leaving out punctuation goes to show that pain and suffering will never have an ending or beginning…..u have a way of putting things into words…..